Revising my draft for this paper has been difficult because my first draft had a vague thesis. I’m trying to improve on that by making a more specific and stronger thesis. My first draft has some summary, so I edited that out and instead of summaries, are now analyses. Originally, I only had two, three quotes and now I’ve including some more and incorporated them into my essay.
I’m still revising, but I’m going to reread the story again and maybe another time and ask myself why did I choose this story out of all the rest? When I find the answer to that, I think it’ll help me with my thesis a lot. The peer editing with the coloring helped me see what was wrong with my paper. I had some irrelevant paragraphs that I hadn’t noticed before. Sometimes my writing would just drift off and go off topic. I still need to fix that and possibly incorporate it into my essay. As of now, I’d say I’m barely half done with editing my essay.