Currently, my revising process is going smoothly. I am reviewing all the notes from the peer revision as well as the professor’s notes and comparing it to my own notes. I am still struggling to develop a clearer thesis. I feel my argument is still weak. I am not sure how to narrow my thesis to a strong, direct thesis. I also find it a bit difficult analyzing the quotes and returning to Johnson’s words without it sounding a lot like a summary.
I don’t think there is much to be excited about right now. There is still a long way to go until I will feel satisfied with the essay. Well, one thing that could be exciting is that I have a substantial amount of quotes to support the thesis. It’s the analyzing that’s hiding the excitement. Another thing that is alright is the length. I feel it’s not too short or too long. I’m not sure what the length is going to be after the next batch of revisions, but, if anything, it’ll just be longer. Hopefully, it won’t be too long or it’ll be a bore to read all of it.
Some questions may be what are ways to analyze a quote without it sounding too much like a summary? How can the thesis relay a more persuasive argument? Should the essay include personal experiences? Is it mandatory to include personal opinions and experiences? How do you return to the author’s words without repeating the analysis or quote? How can summaries be completely taken out of the essay?