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Final Class Reading Cancelled

I’m so sorry but I have to cancel today’s reading.  I’m leaving school early due to a medical emergency in my family.  Hopefully it will turn out to be nothing serious, but I have to go.

I will make a time that I’ll be on campus as soon as I can to return your portfolios to you (or leave them somewhere you can pick them up).

I made a program for today’s reading with recommended texts on writing (America and Anna requested some suggestions); I attach the program here: final-reading-program-2009

I hope to see each of you in person to wish you luck.  Congratulations graduates!

Show and Not Tell?

Most of the techniques we learned are very helpful, but this one just doesn’t intrigue me, both as a reader and writer. I want to figure out if this is simply a matter of personal preference, or if Im not thinking about it correctly.

This opposition came to me last class when we were discussing Rose’s essay on the passing of her grandmother. Almost unanimously, the entire class adviced Rose to show and not tell. Instead of telling the reader the various tones of emotion she is experiencing,  she should instead use examples which will induce that feeling in the reader.

I disagree. Personally I love an eloguent translation of abstract states, such as thoughts and emotions. I can read pages of that.  This is in fact probably the biggest reason why I read. Its pointless to induce someone to feel sad. I (as a reader) have felt sad before. The motivation in reading someone else’s words is they present another’s perspective of such hard to deal with and hard to articulate states of mind.  Since we often avoid deeply poignant subject matter in polite conversations,  we live life  aware of only a single perspective–our own–on the very issues that are hardest for us to deal with.

It seems such an intrinsic preference to me–that I like to be TOLD versus “shown.” I skim the articles for the point. Even when not strapped for time, I seek out the author’s final analysis on the situation. More so than a vital depiction of the situation itself. The overriding general preference, however, is the opposite. What I want to know is, am I missing something? Am I just a minority opinion, or did I grossly misunderstand what you were talking about?

Crimes Against Logic

If there’s one subject that I never had an interest for its Philosophy. Baruch requires us to take it so I finally got around to it this winter intersession. You know what? Surprisingly, I really enjoyed it. The class I took was Logic, and one of the things that I’ve learned is how manipulative language can be. We discussed certain tactics that politicians adore, it truly is incredible how easy it is for them to get away with exaggerations and little fiblets.

One of the assigned readings was a book called Crimes Against Logic. The author discusses how to identify and counter faulty arguments. It’s a short, easy and fun read. Pick it up sometime :)

Good Quote

“Life is what happens when you’re busy making other plans.” – I always wonder how people come up with such quotes- I love this quote I think it’s so true. I’ve tried several times to start off papers using this quote just because I like it so much but it never really meshed in well.

Personal Statement

I’m trying to write my personal statement for law school and i’m having so much trouble- I feel as if I’m selling myself..I realized that in many writing we are required to “sell” ourselves. For example in resumes under objectives..does anyone actually write just to make money? Anyone have any tips on being able to make ourselves sound more genuine?

Al-Qaeda uses style tools too!

I was reading a number of articles about “Jihadism” for my Middle Eastern politics class last week and came across something interesting in the propaganda used for recruitment and support by terrorist organizations. I found some great examples of how Al-Qaeda uses audience targeting, symbolism and imagery to not only effectively communicate their message but also make it difficult for others to denounce. Many of them are long and require thorough explanation so I just put in one ( the best one in my opinion) as an example.

In Osama bin-Laden’s “Decleration of War” he claims that “Hypocrisy stood behind the leader of global idolatry, behind the Hubal of the age — namely, America and its supporter s.”

Below I have added a short excerpt from one lengthy article by Michael Doran that describes the meaning of this sentence:

“Because the symbolism is obscure to most Americans, this sentence was widely mistranslated in the press, but bin Laden’s Muslim audience understood it immediately.

In the early seventh century, when the Prophet Muhammad began to preach Islam to the pagan Arab tribes in Mecca, Hubal was a stone idol that stood in the Kaaba — a structure that Abraham, according to Islamic tradition, originally built on orders from God as a sanctuary of Islam. In the years between Abraham and Muhammad, the tradition runs, the Arabs fell away from true belief and began to worship idols, with Hubal the most powerful of many. When bin Laden calls America “the Hubal of the age,” h e suggests that it is the primary focus of idol worship and that it is polluting the Kaaba, a symbol of Islamic purity. His imagery has a double resonance: it portrays American culture as a font of idolatry while rejecting the American military presence on the Arabian peninsula (which is, by his definition, the holy land of Islam, a place barred to infidels).

Muhammad’s prophecy called the Arabs of Mecca back to their monotheistic birthright. The return to true belief, however, was not an easy one, because the reigning Meccan oligarchy persecuted the early Muslims. By calling for the destruction of Huba l, the Prophet’s message threatened to undermine the special position that Mecca enjoyed in Arabia as a pagan shrine city. With much of their livelihood at stake, the oligarchs punished Muhammad’s followers and conspired to kill him. The Muslims therefor e fled from Mecca to Medina, where they established the umma as a political and religious community. They went on to fight and win a war against Mecca that ended with the destruction of Hubal and the spread of true Islam around the world.

Before the Prophet could achieve this success, however, he encountered the Munafiqun, the Hypocrites of Medina. Muhammad’s acceptance of leadership over the Medinese reduced the power of a number of local tribal leaders. These men outwardly accepte d Islam in order to protect their worldly status, but in their hearts they bore malice toward both the Prophet and his message. Among other misdeeds, the treacherous Munafiqun abandoned Muhammad on the battlefield at a moment when he was already woefully outnumbered. The Hypocrites were apostates who accepted true belief but then rejected it, and as such they were regarded as worse than the infidels who had never embraced Islam to begin with. Islam can understand just how difficult it is for a pagan to leave behind all the beliefs and personal connections that he or she once held dear; it is less forgiving of those who accept the truth and then subvert it.

In bin Laden’s imagery, the leaders of the Arab and Islamic worlds today are Hypocrites, idol worshippers cowering behind America, the Hubal of the age. His sword jabs simultaneously at the United States and the governments allied with it. His att ack was designed to force those governments to choose: You are either with the idol-worshiping enemies of God or you are with the true believers.”

Another example of how skillfully bin-Laden uses propaganda is when he implicitly compares the US/West as an equivalent to the Mongol threat. The Mongol threat refers to the time that the Mongols had sacked Baghdad and Islam’s “decline” had formally began.

Of course, most political propaganda also uses many literary tools to sway the masses. Hitler’s Germany and the Soviet Union are filled with countless examples of such practices. They are also easy to find today if you know how to look.

The dictionary makes a difference

I’ve been thinking a lot about writing lately and the different styles that writers use, and how some of them make their writing so easy and smooth for us, and what I realized is that in order to make a good writing we need to have a lot of vocabulary; some words appear a lot in our essays and some words are just not enough to describe a feeling or an emotion. So just for curiosity I took out a dictionary with synonyms and tried to change some words in my essays, and it really made a difference, the sentences do not sound the same: some of them are better, some of them are worse, but you guys should try it when you revising your expose.

New direction

When I re-read my last meditation I realized that I had taken my mediation in a completely different direction than I had wanted to.  I got caught up in the story aspect of what I was writing about and feel as though I handed in just that; a story.  I want to revise my work so that it is an essay reporting on the different seasons we experience while living in NYC and also the beauty that each season has to offer.  Here is a small sample, I’d appreciate any feed back on the direction I want to take my new mediation.

Thanks!

I fell in love with the summer because of the sense of freedom it gave me.  All the best parties happen to take place during the summer, the backyard parties—city dwellers considering small, grassless, open spaces surrounded by apartment buildings backyards—film festivals and street fairs take place during the summer.  All the girls that like to wear hardly anything come out during the summer; Mr. Softee comes out during the summer!  How any one could not fall in love with summer in the city is beyond me.
For the older crowd there’s a special treat during the summer.  Rooftop drinking.  There’s an undescribable feeling about getting drunk on a rooftop with a breath taking view of the NYC skyline.  Sure it seems dangerous; intoxicating oneself a top a building several feet high in the air, but to my knowledge no one’s ever had that last jaggerbomb it would take to commit an act to justify this belief.

How to become a better blogger/writer

become-a-better-writer

A fellow writing teacher tipped me off to this.

I love it for its utter simplicity.  Just follow these ten easy (ha) steps.  Forget everything I’ve been saying about style tools for your style tool chest, rhythm, defamiliarization, tone, key terms, semi colons and dashes, the authentic voice, vividness, imagery, show don’t tell, think of your audience, forget your audience, old-to-new organization…

Okay, I’m kidding.  Don’t foget it all.  Remeber everything.  And keep writing.

And in case you can’t get enough writing advice:

grammar.quickanddirtytips.com

defamiliarization

This is a little belated, but I was thinking back on our afternoon with the Alexander String Quartet and the discussion we had in class about our experience. I kept coming back to the strange parrallels between music and writing. Rhythm is always the first commonality that comes to mind, but as I listened and watched the musicians play, I couldn’t help thinking that the most IMPORTANT parrallel between music and writing is the power of both to appeal to our emotions by “defamiliarizing” experiences.

I thought it was amazing how in one of the pieces the Quartet played, the composer somehow captured the tone and the feel of bagpipe drones, without flatout replicating their sound. It immediately made me think of what Professor Smith said about great writing “defamiliarizing” certain feelings and ideas to make them more fresh, and much more powerful. Writing translates experience into words, and because language is our most common form of communication, we tend to think that this translation occurs quite naturally. But truly great writing pushes the limits of this translation, and finds ways to make us reevaluate our perceptions and hopefully feel these experiences in a new way. Music does the same thing, but only a few people have the ability to perform this task.